Body                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        High Priority

  • paragraph unity
  • introduce literacy narrative
  • develop idea of negative consequence around external incentives
  •  develop in body, only mention “consequences” in intro and conclusion how we can see this in literacy narratives
  •  bring gee into

Intro

  • defining terms and citing sources  “master narrative”
  • State thesis explicitly
  • establish my perspective, point of view

Local

  • commas go after introductory phrases “for example”
  • “drawing conclusion between literacy and making money” not a complete sentence. It is a dependent clause. Needs to be an independent clause
  • realizing when the sentence is a “run on sentence”  knowing where to put commas and how many of them to put.